Lillian's mom was too busy unloading boxes from the moving truck to listen, so she just nodded her head and kept going.
"The attic is like a mirror, everything on one side of the attic is the same as the other side but flipped! I'm going to climb up there and see what it is like."
Lillian crawled up the narrow stairs at the end of the hall into the dusty attic.
"The last owners left a lot of stuff up here," as she looked around and saw a full attic with toy soldiers on the ground.
She noticed they were moving and quickly got on her hands and knees.
"Wow there is a whole army down here. There is the Sergeant and theres the Corporal. Leading the soldiers around the room. Why can't they hear me? Or see me? Are they just ignoring me?"
Lillian got as close as possible to the soldiers but they still did not see her.
"Help! Help!" Yelled a soldier across the room, being crushed by a truck.
"Oh hell, how did that happen." said the Sergeant.
He started running over to the truck but it was so far for his little legs.
"That's going to take you forever, he's going to be dead by the time you get there!" said Lillian.
Feeling like she needed to help, Lillian picked up the Sergeant and brought him to the distressed soldier.
The Sergeant was trembling. It was not until the soldier cried out again that he shook out of it and helped him from under the truck.
"What just happened. It was like a large gust of wind just flew me across the room. I could not breathe or see it was so fast!" said the Sergeant
"I didn't see sir, I'm just glad you got here in time," said the soldier.
Lillian was watching and listening very intently.
"Should I carry them back? I'm worried that might kill them from shock!"said Lillian
Author's note: My story is based off of the story of Looking Glass House. In the original story Alice enters into the looking glass house to see if there is a fire burning. When she gets into the room she sees chess pieces on scattered on the ground. She notices that they are moving and in distress because the queen's daughter is stuck on the fireplace. Alice helps them get her but moving the king and the queen to their daughter. This frightens them because they cannot see or hear her. I changed the story to a little girl moving into a new house and as she is exploring it she notices army pieces that are alive.
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Hi Kaylee! I really enjoyed this story. It sort of reminded me of an episode of Twilight Zone or something. It was very creative. I had to read it twice to get a better understanding of it. But, this was not because your writing was bad in any way. I am just not the best in depth reader, and this short story definitely had some great depth. Good job!
ReplyDeleteHi, Kaylee! First off, I have to say that I really enjoyed reading this story! I agree with Hayden in that it definitely reminded me of an episode of the Twilight Zone. I like how the story was short, but it still felt like it had a lot of depth to it. Overall, I think you did a great job with this story and I look forward to reading more from you!
ReplyDeleteHi Kaylee,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story. Although it was a little short, I think it was definitely long enough to describe what was going on in the attic. I did kind of wonder how Lillian knew the attic was like a mirror before she went up there, but I didn't really think about it until I read the story again to find stuff to comment about.