Paul had an old building in downtown Dallas that if it sold would bring in a great amount of money for the company, but the building had been listed for years. His wife thought that the best way to decide which daughter should take over the company was to have each of them try to sell the building and the winner is clearly the best saleswoman.
Other employees of the company have tried to sell the building and none have been successful. They doubted that any of the daughters would be able to do it, but their mother demanded that they let them try. "Give my daughters the key to the building, or my husband will have something to say about it," she said. Scared of losing their jobs, the employees immediately brought them the keys and went back to the office to wait and see if the sale would be made.
Each of the daughters had their fair share of connections in the Dallas area but two of the daughters had failed at their shot to sell the building. The third daughter, Samantha, had no trouble selling the building. Within a day of getting her chance she was able to find the perfect buyer and rake in a large commission for her father.
Due to Samantha's great selling skills, her father rewarded her with the company. He even gave her the company car and the corner office.
Authors Notes:
My story was based on the story of Rama and Sita. In this story, the princes are all challenged to bend the bow that has never been bent. The brother Rama was the only one able to bend the bow and for that he was able to marry Sita. Rama was also the brother that was in line for the thrown. I decided to do a modern version of the story and change the sons to daughters.
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| Source: For sale sign |
Hi Kaylee,
ReplyDeleteI liked how you modernized the story of Rama and Sita and switched up the genders of the sons to daughters. In terms of modernizing it, I think it helped me relate to the story more rather than just understand it. I am curious as to why you decided to change the genders, though, and if that means anything. Overall, I enjoyed your story and it was very well-written!
Hi Kaylee!
ReplyDeleteInteresting choice on changing the story to a modern day story about real estate. That is something I am not sure many would have done. So, good job on thinking outside the box. I wonder what made Samantha such a great seller? Why weren't the other two sisters good at selling? Interesting things to think about. Good job on your story.
Hi Kaylee! I really love the modern twist on the story. It’s nice to see that a daughter was able to easily sell the house instead of a son. If you were to add more, why were the other two daughters unable to sell the building? Or, how did the daughters react to their sister selling the building and getting all of the business? Those are just ideas for if you ever wanted to add more to the story. Great story!
ReplyDeleteHi kaylee,
ReplyDeleteI love the story especially with the modern twist on it. The story flowed really well and didn’t have any grammatical errors that I could see. I did think the story ended very fast with a short climax and then strait to the end but that could have been how it was in the original story. As stated it was a good story. Keep it up.
Hi Kaylee! I enjoyed reading a modern version of this story, I especially always enjoy a slight gender swab that better reflect how we are as a society today. The story flowed really well but it might have been interesting to get to know more about how each one of the sisters tried to sell the house.
ReplyDelete- Anna Margret
Hello Kaylee, I really like your version of the story of "Rama and Sita." I thought it was a cool idea to change the daughters to son because it give a cool modern twist on it. I thought your story flowed and was written really well. Overall i thought it was a great idea for the story, keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHi Kaylee!
ReplyDeleteI also liked your modern twist on "Rama and Sita" with daughters instead of sons. We sometimes get over looked ;) I am just a tad confused on how this James person is connected to the story. The only thing I would change about your story is just adding how each sister tried to sell the building. The two sisters failed attempts and then Samantha's success in one day trying to sell the building. Do love how Samantha got the corner office though!